tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3982837118358902227.post6751290008452750787..comments2023-07-14T06:17:49.677-04:00Comments on The Daring Novelist: Two Very Short Flash StoriesThe Daring Novelisthttp://www.blogger.com/profile/01676188266569869059noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3982837118358902227.post-85367518745662197992011-05-08T20:47:37.617-04:002011-05-08T20:47:37.617-04:00You caught me. The second one didn't feel rig...You caught me. The second one didn't feel right, and I did a quick rewrite of the opening before posting - so it was decidedly less polished.The Daring Novelisthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01676188266569869059noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3982837118358902227.post-18476835945904326952011-05-08T03:52:50.954-04:002011-05-08T03:52:50.954-04:00I liked the first one more than the second one- In...I liked the first one more than the second one- In the second one you used "say" to often in the beginning, perhaps a different word would suit the story better for one of them.<br /><br />Thanks for posting I enjoyed the read.Summer Rosshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08122694893668693244noreply@blogger.com